Comments and Evaluation for N450: Leadership & Management Paper (WAC)
You need to work on writing conventions: grammar, punctuation, & spelling
· Work on clarity – be sure your audience can completely understand and follow your writing
· Use precise and appropriate word choice
· Use a scholarly and professional tone
· Do not:
· use anthropomorphisms
· use contractions
· begin sentences with conjunctions
· Be sure each body paragraph has a clear main point, which directly supports the thesis statement
· You need to provide more source material.
· You rely too heavily on your source material. Source material is supposed to be used to better explain a complicated issue, point, etc., provide an example, or support your ideas, points, analysis, etc.
· 8-10 pages in length not including the title page and references page (you must meet the minimum requirement of 4 pages)
· Minimum of 4 scholarly sources: sources must be recent (within 5 years); older sources must be approved by instructor
· APA
· Your in-text parenthetical citations are not properly formatted
· You MUST use signal phrases before the start of paraphrased source material and a parenthetical citation at the end of it, to indicate where it begins and where it ends
· Your reference entries are not properly formatted
· Your “References” page is not properly formatted
· Write more concisely
· Introduction
· Provide a clear, strong, and accurate thesis statement (no lists)
· Provide enough information to prepare your audience to read your paper
· Introduce the overarching concept of the paper
· Do not discuss the scenario
· Nurse Leadership & BSN Education
· Explain more thoroughly what nursing leadership entails
· Provide more examples of ways in which nurses are leaders
· Explain more thoroughly the importance of effective leadership choices and actions in nursing
· Explain more thoroughly the benefits, for nurse leaders, of a BSN education
· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion
· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the benefits of being BSN prepared
· Description of Scenario
· Introduce the scenario
· Clearly connect the scenario to the overall purpose of the paper (without directly mentioning your paper)
· Describe the scenario more concisely
· Describe the scenario more thoroughly
· Describe the scenario more objectively
· Plan & Rationale
· More thoroughly describe what you plan to do and the intended resolution
· More thoroughly describe your rationale
· Explain your rationale for the leadership choices and plan of action. This needs to include some knowledge, concepts, and/or skills you learned in your chosen non-clinical nursing and general education courses.
· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion
· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for your rationale
· More effectively defend your choice of leadership style(s)
· More thoroughly compare and contrast your chosen style to another possible style
· More thoroughly and effectively argue why your choice would be the most effective for the scenario and why
· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for your chosen style
· Implementation of Plan
· Describe more thoroughly how you would implement your plan
· Explain more thoroughly the specific steps you would take
· More clearly identify how the steps you are staking reflect your chosen leadership style(s)
· Describe more thoroughly the knowledge, concepts, and/or skills from your non-clinical nursing and general education courses you plan to use in the execution of your plan
· Explain more thoroughly why and how you will use the described knowledge, concepts, and/or skills from your non-clinical nursing and general education courses in the execution of your plan
· Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion
· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for how you will implement your plan
· Awareness & Use of Effective Leadership & Management Choices
· Explain more thoroughly the need for nurses to be aware of their leadership and management style choices
· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the need for nurses to be aware of their leadership and management style choices
· Explain more thoroughly the need for nurses to employ the most effective leadership and management style choices for any given situation (this includes changing styles for different situations)
· Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the need for nurses to employ the most effective leadership and management style choices for any given situation
· Explain the need and benefit for the constant awareness and use of effective leadership and management styles and choices. Use scholarly source material for support.
· Conclusion
· Provide final commentary regarding the benefits of effective leadership and management choices
· Summarize the importance of nurses being aware of and making effective leadership and management choices
· Provide a synopsis of the importance of a BSN education for nurse leaders and the importance of effective leadership choices
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